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the MI6 community bond film [Trail run]

VirageVirage
edited September 2011 in Fan Creations Posts: 1,856
Okay this is a little thing I came up with, this is going to be complicated....

so this is sorta like a fan script,Not for filming, that we can all contribute to. so I'll start it off In a minute, you can write 1-10 lines of dialogue and/or action after that you can post,the next post will be a continuation.

the only thing I'm going to give you is the first few lines and then it's all up to you, I'll drop in occasionally to sorta get things moving and prevent 2345 posts in one scene! Also no ignoring others posts you HAVE to continue it on, I'll be the only one back spacing to prevent writer's block

REMEMBER THIS IS JUST A SCRIPT FOR FUN!!!
okay

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(gun barrel opens to..)

(Paris a static shot shows the seine and the twinkling lights of the eiffel tower)
(in a back street cafe a man sits alone, waiting, his name James Bond....
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  • Monsieur_AubergineMonsieur_Aubergine Top of the Eiffel Tower with a fly in my soup!
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    a man sits next to his table and offers him a cigarette)
    Bond: I don't smoke
    Man: You do now
    (the man leaves the cigarette and lighter on the table and leaves, Bond lights it and holds it away from his mouth still looking at it. The cigarette immediately burns away to reveal a capsule, Bond snaps the capsule to reveal a note, it reads....
  • DarthDimiDarthDimi Behind you!Moderator
    edited August 2011 Posts: 24,262
    GIRL WORKS FOR ROMERO
    YOU MUST KILL HER

    (Bond is visibly confused. He stand up, throws a few Euros on the table, turns around and...
  • 0BradyM0Bondfanatic70BradyM0Bondfanatic7 Quantum Floral Arrangements: "We Have Petals Everywhere"
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    A gun is shoved against his chest and he is face to face with a man of equal height, black hair parted to the right side, his skin oily with what appears to be sweat. Possibly out of nervousness or of his Italian roots. His black suit with a dark pink under shirt add an overconfident air to his persona. The gun clicks and Bond is led by the man into the back alley behind the restaurant, Bond now with his back to the mysterious man.

    Man: "This isn't the first time MI6 has been nipping at my heels Mr. Bond"
    Bond: "Call me James....Romero is it?" *Romero is identified and the gun is pressed harder into Bond's back*
    Romero: "So, it is true. It seems my reputation is better known that I once believed. Shame... Needn't worry though, you'll be out of my hair in moments. I suppose you came for the girl, but I must tell you she is no longer in the game. I hope she wasn't of importance...."

    Bond takes a chance and risks a counter on Romero. He turns on his heel and reaches for the gun....
  • shadowonthesunshadowonthesun Banned
    edited August 2011 Posts: 1,894
    When a loud CRACK echoes through the alley. Romero drops deap, and a pool of blood quickly expands around him. He instantly adopts a COMBAT STANCE, his gun out, as he searches for the shooter. Nothing. But then he WAVERS. Bond lowers his gun and looks down - the bullet has passed clean through Romero and lodged itself in his chest. Bond COLLAPSES, face-up in the alley. His breath goes ragged and he quickly starts to bleed out. His eyes close and his breathing stops as the screen fades to black.

    After an extended pause, a title card fades in:

    36 HOURS AGO
    MONTEVIDEO, URUGUAY
  • VirageVirage
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    An Aston Martin DB5 thunders down the street pursued by two motor bikers....
  • 0BradyM0Bondfanatic70BradyM0Bondfanatic7 Quantum Floral Arrangements: "We Have Petals Everywhere"
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    In the Aston sits James Bond Agent 007 of the British Secret Service. He drove straight and narrow past the expanses on hotels and the stretch of water to the most luxorious hotel to be had: The Sheraton Montevideo. The S's on the top corners of the hotel drew him in, and his escorts on motorcycles led him into the lobby. The area was warming and gave Bond a sense of comfort. Though in the back of his head he questioned why M had him sent to Uruguay so hastly. His escorts from the Deuxième Bureau politely bid him farewell and told him to wait for only half an hour. Bond takes a seat at the bar to the left of the lobby entrance, and orders his usual poison. Condensation dripped down his glass and gave him a clear view of a man approaching his left side. Surprise seemed to be the intention, but never entered fruition.
    Bond: "Business or pleasure Mathis." The frenchman saw he had been caught and dropped his act.
    Mathis:"James, you know well enough that when I am on the French government's time, pleasure is only had when business is finished." He laughed heartily, slapped Bond on the right shoulder in a playful manner and sat at that very side of the bar next to him.
    Bond spotted a manila folder in Mathis's left hand and took a final lurch of Martini before continuing his questioning.
    Bond:"Well, I hope you know why I'm here Mathis, because all M gave me was a passport and your escort." Mathis grew serious at this and began his reasoning.
    Mathis:"It's Bradley. 6 found him dead on the street in Paris this morning. Two shots in the head. Overkill by French standards."
    Bond was shocked if anything, and explained his dissinvolvment with the affair. "I heard about his extended trip in Paris, but the operation was above my level. M said 6 was working Bradley as a mole. That's all I know." At this Mathis tossed forth a photograph from the file. Bond saw a chizled face with stark black hair parted to the right side, and oily skin. He had never seen the man before.
    Mathis:"His name is Romero. A man of Spanish blood raised in Italy by poor parents. He grew up selling papers across Florence and beginning adulthood as a merchant to save money for a higher education. You can see that went nowhere as he is on MI6's most wanted. I'll skip personal matters. I have the file here if you want to read up. You are not here to write his biography after all. The Deuxième fear there is danger in this man. He has recently popped up on the grid in Miami and was on a list of guests to a private auction at one of Florida's finest accommodating spending houses. He gave one bid in the 17th series, a fine painting held by Napoleon at Saint Helena."
    Bond:"So 6 is on his tail for bidding on an old French antiquity?"
    Mathis:"The painting was not what he was after. It was what is in the painting. Romero was bidding with a combined group of fifty. All prominent men, and thirteen of the fifty were Quantum members. The thirteen men were in place to outnumber the other rich members of the auction house in the hopes that one of Quantum would obtain the piece. We expect a connection between Quantum and this Romero. He won the painting in the end, and as he hasn't turned up dead, we suspect ties between him and Quantum, and that he secured the painting in clear lineage to the group. He is indeed good friends with the owner of the house, a Mr. John Barriston Harris. He may very well have secured Harris to do the drop and get in with the deal to endorse Quantum's purchase of the art piece. Our suspicions of Romero's lineage were soon seen to be true. He left Miami with the members on a private jet after the festivities."
    Bond:"So we've got a secret dead drop in a painting, and a man inside the spending house who has ties to Romero, who is in bed with Quantum. How do we know if the drop is legitimate and where does Bradley enter the picture?"
    Mathis:" We had your Bradley inserted into play six months ago and began working a friendship with Romero. He was at the bidding and was flying on the jet with the rest of the Quantum members with the cover of a powerful oil baron. He planted a bug and found chatter about a drop as you said inside the painting in former possession of my country's dear Napoleon. He was originally to get Romero in place for interrogation, but plans soon changed with Quantum's physical presence. His mission was updated and he was to now secure information on the contents of the painting and why said object would interest Quantum. Only three short days ago he called in to 6 from his mobile with news of what the painting held. You'll never guess what it is."
    Bond:"What?"

    *SORRY FOR THE LENGTH! I had to finish off the idea I had and underestimated how long it would turn out to be. In the future I will greatly lessen my length of posts as to allow maximum creativity to others.
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  • VirageVirage
    edited August 2011 Posts: 1,856
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    From This Point on if the 10 line limit is broken all lines after the 11 will be "backspaced"

    Also this is a pre-titles WHERE'S THE ACTION!!!!
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  • shadowonthesunshadowonthesun Banned
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    Bond never finds out - Mathis' head SNAPS BACKWARDS. The sniper who shot Bond in Paris is here in Uruguay, and is now targeting Mathis. The agent slumps to the ground, dead. Bond has no time to get to his friend as he comes under repeated fire from the shooter.
  • 0BradyM0Bondfanatic70BradyM0Bondfanatic7 Quantum Floral Arrangements: "We Have Petals Everywhere"
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    Just a question, how can the guy that shot at Bond shoot Mathis when Bond gets shot thirty six hours from the meeting with Mathis is Uruguay??
  • shadowonthesunshadowonthesun Banned
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    Because the scenes in Montevideo take place 36 hours before the scenes in Paris. If Bond can get from Uruguay to France in thirty-six hours, so too can the shooter. The shooter is evidently following Bond. After all, his target in the Paris alleyway was Romero, not Bond.

    The implication of this is obvious: everyone else to this Romero case keeps getting shot.
  • VirageVirage
    Posts: 1,856
    Bond dives for cover behind a conveniently placed sofa.
    He pulls out his trusty ppk and waits
    the sniper is firing blind, as the sofa is part of a very large set.
    But... the sniper hits an conveniently placed gas powered chandelier.
    a bullet hits the chain and crashes down to the lobby floor starting a fire....
  • shadowonthesunshadowonthesun Banned
    edited August 2011 Posts: 1,894
    The fire quickly becomes a CONFLAGRATION, engulfing everything behind the bar and BLOCKING ACCESS to the door. Bond is now trapped in the burning bar, several stories above the ground floor.

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    Re-reading that massive entry, 0BradyM0Bondfanatic7, I think you're kind of missing the aim here. This is shaping up as a script, not a novel. Lines like "Bond was shocked if anything, and explained his dissinvolvment with the affair" are out of place in a script. The idea is to quickly, specifically and neatly describe actions. Leave emotional cues out of it; actors hate it when writers try to tell them exactly what they should do. So the line "Bond was shocked if anything, and explained his dissinvolvment with the affair" should read as "Bond is shocked by this". The "if anything" is too ambiguous, while his dialogue will explain why he has nothing to do with it, so there's no need to state that he is explaining himself.

    I know I'm being critical, but it's intended as constructive criticism.
  • 0BradyM0Bondfanatic70BradyM0Bondfanatic7 Quantum Floral Arrangements: "We Have Petals Everywhere"
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    *We must remember Bond is on the ground floor, in the bar left of the main lobby. If we're staying true to previous entries*
  • Monsieur_AubergineMonsieur_Aubergine Top of the Eiffel Tower with a fly in my soup!
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    Bond scrambles for the Bar through the gunfire. Once behind here the reflection of the lobby is clearly visible in the steel edges of the cabinet. He can make out the snipers figure through the flames. Bond spies the fruit knives on the bar shelf...he grabs 3, takes a swig of Brandy from the bottle next to him and...
  • shadowonthesunshadowonthesun Banned
    edited August 2011 Posts: 1,894
    Uh, the bar is on fire. Completely - and it's spreading. Alcohol is highly flammable, and that's what's fuelling the inferno. My entry should read "the fire quickly becomes a CONFLAGRATION, engulfing everything behind the bar". Bond can't get anywhere near it.
  • VirageVirage
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    It's called hollywood now on with the script...

    (going good guys!)
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  • shadowonthesunshadowonthesun Banned
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    Bond staggers back from the INTENSE HEAT - the fruit knives and brandy are not an option. He is visibly annoyed that he made such a mistake. The sniper has now stopped shooting; he is out of ammunition. By now, the fire has taken hold of the bar and the BACK WALL is now a wall of fire. We can hear SIRENS in the distance as the fire brigade race to the fire, but they are too far away and CANNOT REACH THE HOTEL before Bond is burned to death. Bond LOOKS AROUND and settles on THE WINDOWS, FOUR STORYES ABOVE GROUND as the only way out.
  • Monsieur_AubergineMonsieur_Aubergine Top of the Eiffel Tower with a fly in my soup!
    edited August 2011 Posts: 642
    (@shadowonthesun - no need to negate my effort as it doesn't fit your plan, I could ask why we are 4 storeys up suddenly? but i wont ,lets get on with adhering to each others contribution)

    He takes a deep breath and prepares to hurl himself at the window. As he goes to move he is grabbed violently by the sniper who has made his way to Bond. A violent hands on fight ensues, clothing is starting to burn and the ferocity of the fight matches that of the fire. Eventually Bond has the edge and leads both of them to the window. Bond uses the butt of the snipers gun to smash the glass of the grand window..backdraft..Bond and sniper are sent hurtling through the air by the huge surge of hot energy....
  • VirageVirage
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    Bond crashes into the right wall while the sniper is tossed out the window, to live to die another day (remember his got to be alive to shoot romeo.) Bond stands up he feels round the wall and finds an interior door...
  • Monsieur_AubergineMonsieur_Aubergine Top of the Eiffel Tower with a fly in my soup!
    edited August 2011 Posts: 642
    He goes through the door, The elevator is in front of him with a sign on the wall "in the event of fire please do not use the elevator" Bond smirks and races up the staircase next to him up to the roof...he sees the assassin get up and run from the building down the street into the night..he notices the telegraph wire stretching from the trademark 'S' on the corner of the building leading to...
  • shadowonthesunshadowonthesun Banned
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    (@shadowonthesun - no need to negate my effort as it doesn't fit your plan, I could ask why we are 4 storeys up suddenly? but i wont ,lets get on with adhering to each others contribution)
    I was resetting the board so that we all knew where to begin.
  • Monsieur_AubergineMonsieur_Aubergine Top of the Eiffel Tower with a fly in my soup!
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    Cool. No probs mate. Let's make this epic! :-)
  • 0BradyM0Bondfanatic70BradyM0Bondfanatic7 Quantum Floral Arrangements: "We Have Petals Everywhere"
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    A BOMB! It is not a telegraph wire but a strand of yellow and red wire connecting to a pipe bomb set to blow in 6 minutes. Bond is then shot at from ahead of him, and he spots two more snipers set to finish the failed sniper's work. He runs and rolls to the downstairs entrance as the ground is peppered with shots. Bond hears a wheezing and opens the door to see Mathis slowly making his way up the steps, grasping his wound. Bond is shocked but not surprised and grins. "Never play dead again!" he shouts over the shots. Mathis is about to speak but now shots are coming from all sides and the pair head down the steps only to meet two men armed with automatic guns just two feet down the landing...
  • Char35tChar35t
    edited August 2011 Posts: 289
    Bond's eye catchs a glimmer in the moon light hanging from a low laying branch of a blooming moch orange. The flames leap up from the windows as Mathis drops a "special cocktail" upon the tow on the landing, two "men" burst into flames and shoot each other. Bond reaches threw the broken landing window and pulls back a cheap silver chain latched to an expensive Sienna Italain leather wallet and platinum Patek Philippe pocket watch...
  • shadowonthesunshadowonthesun Banned
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    Bond hears a wheezing and opens the door to see Mathis slowly making his way up the steps, grasping his wound.
    Mathis was shot. In the head. With a high-velocity bullet from a sniper rifle. Most of his brains are scattered over the bar. There's no way he is faking.
  • 0BradyM0Bondfanatic70BradyM0Bondfanatic7 Quantum Floral Arrangements: "We Have Petals Everywhere"
    edited August 2011 Posts: 28,694
    Bond hears a wheezing and opens the door to see Mathis slowly making his way up the steps, grasping his wound.
    Mathis was shot. In the head. With a high-velocity bullet from a sniper rifle. Most of his brains are scattered over the bar. There's no way he is faking.
    Mathis's head could have 'snapped backwards' from the force of the blow in say, his lower abdomen. I didn't assume a headshot as no blood splatter was elaborated upon . he could have been grazed slightly and still live. Here's what I don't get: So Mathis definitely can't survive the shot but Bond can magically transport himself to the fourth floor mid scene and the sniper can fall four stories and still survive? When is the crazy octopus going to show up and shake Bond out of this Aston Martin??
  • shadowonthesunshadowonthesun Banned
    edited August 2011 Posts: 1,894
    It clearly says that "the agent slumped to the ground, dead". And if you're deliberately ignoring continuity for the sake of having things your way simply because you think someone else did, you're only going to ruin it.
  • 0BradyM0Bondfanatic70BradyM0Bondfanatic7 Quantum Floral Arrangements: "We Have Petals Everywhere"
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    Slumping to the ground dead doesn't mean the person is dead. It appeared that he died to Bond. I digress.
  • shadowonthesunshadowonthesun Banned
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    He's clearly described as dead. It was my intention that he is dead, and that Bond would accept that he is dead. As has been explained, everyone connected to Romero is being killed off. Ignoring that basically undoes everything that has been set up. But, if you insist:

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    Bond turns back just in time to see one of the men unleash a blistering wave of gunfire. There is nowhere for Mathis to go, and he is almost torn apart by the hail of bullets. There is absolutely no way the Frenchman could survive being shot this time. Mathis is absolutely, unequivocably dead.
  • Char35tChar35t
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    just change it to Lieter....


    Bond's eye catchs a glimmer in the moon light hanging from a low laying branch of a blooming moch orange. The flames leap up from the windows as Lieter drops a "special cocktail" upon the tow on the landing, two "men" burst into flames and shoot each other. Bond reaches threw the broken landing window and pulls back a cheap silver chain latched to an expensive Sienna Italain leather wallet and platinum Patek Philippe pocket watch...

    Lieter calls from above Bond "...Heelo James....Its hot in the old town tonight!"
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